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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph…2010 Teacher Winner by jerri iverson</title>
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		<dc:creator>jerri iverson</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sat, 19 Jun 2010 00:18:04 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>As Father&#039;s Day approaches this year - I search through old photos of special moments with my Dad.  The time at the beach when it was just the two of us, leave footprints in the sand, listening to the water lapping at the beach, and we even built a sand castle.   When we left that day, I felt that my Dad and I were closer than we had ever been.   For years, he would call me his sand monkey.   How I miss those special moments in real life, but down deep -- those memories will never go away.  I love you Dad.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>As Father&#8217;s Day approaches this year &#8211; I search through old photos of special moments with my Dad.  The time at the beach when it was just the two of us, leave footprints in the sand, listening to the water lapping at the beach, and we even built a sand castle.   When we left that day, I felt that my Dad and I were closer than we had ever been.   For years, he would call me his sand monkey.   How I miss those special moments in real life, but down deep &#8212; those memories will never go away.  I love you Dad.</p>
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		<title>Comment on &#8220;Three-Meal Weather&#8221; by Alex</title>
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		<dc:creator>Alex</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 08 Jun 2010 15:39:12 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>iecAppatiteotropolis
By Alexander 

In the middle of the Dessert Desert on planet   food pyramid is the small city of Appatiteotropolis which was the richest town in the desert because people don’t have to pay for food, they had all the food they needed fell from the sky. The city has food storms three times a day every day. 


 In the morning during breakfast mouth watering bacon falls from the sky with some spicy sausages and a side of chewy hot dogs and later a rain shower of orange juice.  
During rush hour, lunch is a creamy milkshake shower with gigantic clouds of cheese-burgers the size of Mount Everest and a hail the size of French fries, actually they were French fries.

During the night there is a shower of milk, chicken wings, juicy hot dogs and meaty steak. And for desert there was an after-dinner rain of Oreos, creamy ice cream and a drizzle of fizzy coca cola. Then everyone goes to bed to start the day all over again. 

But the planet pyramid is too far away from earth for people to travel to. But one day in the future maybe humans might be able to travel there for an everlasting feast.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>iecAppatiteotropolis<br />
By Alexander </p>
<p>In the middle of the Dessert Desert on planet   food pyramid is the small city of Appatiteotropolis which was the richest town in the desert because people don’t have to pay for food, they had all the food they needed fell from the sky. The city has food storms three times a day every day. </p>
<p> In the morning during breakfast mouth watering bacon falls from the sky with some spicy sausages and a side of chewy hot dogs and later a rain shower of orange juice.<br />
During rush hour, lunch is a creamy milkshake shower with gigantic clouds of cheese-burgers the size of Mount Everest and a hail the size of French fries, actually they were French fries.</p>
<p>During the night there is a shower of milk, chicken wings, juicy hot dogs and meaty steak. And for desert there was an after-dinner rain of Oreos, creamy ice cream and a drizzle of fizzy coca cola. Then everyone goes to bed to start the day all over again. </p>
<p>But the planet pyramid is too far away from earth for people to travel to. But one day in the future maybe humans might be able to travel there for an everlasting feast.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph&#8230;2009 H.S. Winner by Devika</title>
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		<dc:creator>Devika</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Jun 2010 16:08:24 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>She just couldn’t look at it anymore.
Not once could she raise her head to look at where it lay, pitilessly abandoned. 

Tara had been sitting there for almost an hour now. Neighbours, friends and even passer-bys had come and gone; some had whispered something incomprehensible, others had just peered nervously at her- fearing an emotional outburst lest they said something wrong.
But she continued to sit there – hardly noticing all those who cared for her. Her heart, it seemed was with the only one who didn’t care. 

She had sauntered into Tara’s life with the easy grace of those who are admired everywhere they go. Tara, needless to say was fascinated by the charm and easy splendour that she exuded. She looked perfect no matter what she wore and yet, it looked as if she really hadn’t tried hard for it to be so. Tara and she had struck up a friendship instantly, Tara needed someone to hang onto and she- well, someone had to need her and that was all. People were attracted to her like moth to a flame; boys, girls and teachers alike. Tara couldn’t be happier. She had found an anchor and a friend. Each night, she poured out her heart and soul and was listened to patiently; soothing words, gasps and peals of laughter- always at their cue. 

Slowly and unthinkingly, Tara was losing. A single moment without her felt like the air was closing in. Tara, although brilliant at math, refused to take it up in high school “because she isn’t taking it!”
A terrible change came over the girl. Tara spoke only to the ones she liked, ate only what she did and refused to do anything she didn’t. When she had a boyfriend, Tara got one and when she dumped him, Tara didn’t see the point of hers anymore. Although it was obvious, Tara refused to believe she had made the wrong choices. The loud, ostentatious world of her friend alarmed her middle class sensibilities and she really did love that boy; yet, she suffered in silence. 

Then one day, it was a year that they had met. Tara, mindful of her woes and yet grateful to her friend for having “changed her life” decided to celebrate it in the way she knew ‘she’ would love. Hadn’t she always shown an unusual interest in her baking? Well, that was it, Tara was going to bake her the most amazing cake ever. She set at the task cheerfully, working all day. At three in the afternoon, as was customary, they met. 

“Tara—“she started
“I know, I know!” cried a visibly excited Tara, “It’s a year since we met!”
For the first time ever, Tara saw uncertainty flicker across her friend’s face.
“Oh. Really? Erm..see, the thing is, we have to talk. I’m not so sure whether this is the right time or not, but we do. It’s actually perfect in a twisted sort of way, but…” she trailed off.
“What is it?” asked Tara. Maybe this was a joke…maybe not.
“I’m sick of you. You and your parasitic personality scare me now. People are starting to wonder… I mean, you need to have a life! When I was new here, I needed you, but now…I have friends of my own. I don’t need you anymore. So just please, leave me alone.”With that, she turned and left.

The dish slipped from Tara’s hand and clattered to the floor, scattering the beautiful cake across the road. Tara fell to her knees and watched her retreating figure hopelessly. What could she do? 

She sat there for hours, contemplating, too overcome by grief to even cry. With her gone, she was nothing. Their friendship had meant the world to her. To Tara, she was the source of life. She kept her going. If there was no her, there would be no Tara…

There was just one way.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>She just couldn’t look at it anymore.<br />
Not once could she raise her head to look at where it lay, pitilessly abandoned. </p>
<p>Tara had been sitting there for almost an hour now. Neighbours, friends and even passer-bys had come and gone; some had whispered something incomprehensible, others had just peered nervously at her- fearing an emotional outburst lest they said something wrong.<br />
But she continued to sit there – hardly noticing all those who cared for her. Her heart, it seemed was with the only one who didn’t care. </p>
<p>She had sauntered into Tara’s life with the easy grace of those who are admired everywhere they go. Tara, needless to say was fascinated by the charm and easy splendour that she exuded. She looked perfect no matter what she wore and yet, it looked as if she really hadn’t tried hard for it to be so. Tara and she had struck up a friendship instantly, Tara needed someone to hang onto and she- well, someone had to need her and that was all. People were attracted to her like moth to a flame; boys, girls and teachers alike. Tara couldn’t be happier. She had found an anchor and a friend. Each night, she poured out her heart and soul and was listened to patiently; soothing words, gasps and peals of laughter- always at their cue. </p>
<p>Slowly and unthinkingly, Tara was losing. A single moment without her felt like the air was closing in. Tara, although brilliant at math, refused to take it up in high school “because she isn’t taking it!”<br />
A terrible change came over the girl. Tara spoke only to the ones she liked, ate only what she did and refused to do anything she didn’t. When she had a boyfriend, Tara got one and when she dumped him, Tara didn’t see the point of hers anymore. Although it was obvious, Tara refused to believe she had made the wrong choices. The loud, ostentatious world of her friend alarmed her middle class sensibilities and she really did love that boy; yet, she suffered in silence. </p>
<p>Then one day, it was a year that they had met. Tara, mindful of her woes and yet grateful to her friend for having “changed her life” decided to celebrate it in the way she knew ‘she’ would love. Hadn’t she always shown an unusual interest in her baking? Well, that was it, Tara was going to bake her the most amazing cake ever. She set at the task cheerfully, working all day. At three in the afternoon, as was customary, they met. </p>
<p>“Tara—“she started<br />
“I know, I know!” cried a visibly excited Tara, “It’s a year since we met!”<br />
For the first time ever, Tara saw uncertainty flicker across her friend’s face.<br />
“Oh. Really? Erm..see, the thing is, we have to talk. I’m not so sure whether this is the right time or not, but we do. It’s actually perfect in a twisted sort of way, but…” she trailed off.<br />
“What is it?” asked Tara. Maybe this was a joke…maybe not.<br />
“I’m sick of you. You and your parasitic personality scare me now. People are starting to wonder… I mean, you need to have a life! When I was new here, I needed you, but now…I have friends of my own. I don’t need you anymore. So just please, leave me alone.”With that, she turned and left.</p>
<p>The dish slipped from Tara’s hand and clattered to the floor, scattering the beautiful cake across the road. Tara fell to her knees and watched her retreating figure hopelessly. What could she do? </p>
<p>She sat there for hours, contemplating, too overcome by grief to even cry. With her gone, she was nothing. Their friendship had meant the world to her. To Tara, she was the source of life. She kept her going. If there was no her, there would be no Tara…</p>
<p>There was just one way.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph&#8230;2009 H.S. Winner by Olivia Ottavainen</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2009/05/19/tell-the-story-behind-this-photograph2009-hs-winner/comment-page-1/#comment-440</link>
		<dc:creator>Olivia Ottavainen</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 28 May 2010 21:14:17 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>&#039;&#039;Mom, why can&#039;t I take the cake over?&#039;&#039; asked seventeen year old Amy .
&#039;&#039;Because you might drop it on the way over&#039;&#039;answered my mom.  It was 
Saturday and my mom and I were about to go over to my Aunt&#039;s house
because it was her birthday today.  My Aunt&#039;s house is five blocks away
from mine.&#039;&#039;I&#039;m seventeen,Mom&#039;&#039;I said.&#039;&#039;Okay, Amy&#039;&#039;said my mom&#039;&#039;You
win.&#039;&#039;  &#039;&#039;Should I get going,Mom?&#039;&#039;I asked.&#039;&#039;Sure&#039;&#039;mom answered&#039;&#039;I just 
have to do something,so I&#039;ll catch up to you&#039;&#039;.  &#039;&#039;Sure&#039;&#039;I said.  Two blocks
till I reached my Aunts I triped and fell.  &#039;&#039;PLOP!&#039;&#039;The cake fell out of my 
hands.  Oh,no I though!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>&#8221;Mom, why can&#8217;t I take the cake over?&#8221; asked seventeen year old Amy .<br />
&#8221;Because you might drop it on the way over&#8221;answered my mom.  It was<br />
Saturday and my mom and I were about to go over to my Aunt&#8217;s house<br />
because it was her birthday today.  My Aunt&#8217;s house is five blocks away<br />
from mine.&#8221;I&#8217;m seventeen,Mom&#8221;I said.&#8221;Okay, Amy&#8221;said my mom&#8221;You<br />
win.&#8221;  &#8221;Should I get going,Mom?&#8221;I asked.&#8221;Sure&#8221;mom answered&#8221;I just<br />
have to do something,so I&#8217;ll catch up to you&#8221;.  &#8221;Sure&#8221;I said.  Two blocks<br />
till I reached my Aunts I triped and fell.  &#8221;PLOP!&#8221;The cake fell out of my<br />
hands.  Oh,no I though!</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph&#8230;2009 H.S. Winner by Ann Blake</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2009/05/19/tell-the-story-behind-this-photograph2009-hs-winner/comment-page-1/#comment-439</link>
		<dc:creator>Ann Blake</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 28 May 2010 20:15:53 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Sometimes I do things right...
Sometimes I make mistakes
Sometimes when I do something right like make a cake
Then something wrong like drop it 
I feel rotten, really really rotten
For awhile</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Sometimes I do things right&#8230;<br />
Sometimes I make mistakes<br />
Sometimes when I do something right like make a cake<br />
Then something wrong like drop it<br />
I feel rotten, really really rotten<br />
For awhile</p>
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		<title>Comment on &#8220;Mob&#8217;s Voice versus Hero&#8217;s Voice&#8221; Prompt by Macy Mousseau</title>
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		<dc:creator>Macy Mousseau</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 26 May 2010 17:40:28 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Letting Go
Suspicious 

                                                    Determined


Want control                                  Want to have space


Don&#039;t want to lose my child

                                                    Just want to be a teen

Trying to be responsible 

                                                Trying to have fun

It was so much easier
when you were little 

                                               I can&#039;t be your baby forever                 

 
Why can&#039;t you just cooperate?

    
                                                 Just an extra half hour?


Then you&#039;re going to get into trouble

 
                                                   But i&#039;m responsible

I&#039;m not sure

   
                                                    please mom,please!?

Will you call me?
So i know you&#039;re safe? 


                                                    I can do that



I love you Honey                            I love you Mom</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Letting Go<br />
Suspicious </p>
<p>                                                    Determined</p>
<p>Want control                                  Want to have space</p>
<p>Don&#8217;t want to lose my child</p>
<p>                                                    Just want to be a teen</p>
<p>Trying to be responsible </p>
<p>                                                Trying to have fun</p>
<p>It was so much easier<br />
when you were little </p>
<p>                                               I can&#8217;t be your baby forever                 </p>
<p>Why can&#8217;t you just cooperate?</p>
<p>                                                 Just an extra half hour?</p>
<p>Then you&#8217;re going to get into trouble</p>
<p>                                                   But i&#8217;m responsible</p>
<p>I&#8217;m not sure</p>
<p>                                                    please mom,please!?</p>
<p>Will you call me?<br />
So i know you&#8217;re safe? </p>
<p>                                                    I can do that</p>
<p>I love you Honey                            I love you Mom</p>
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		<title>Comment on &#8220;Mob&#8217;s Voice versus Hero&#8217;s Voice&#8221; Prompt by Macy Mousseau</title>
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		<dc:creator>Macy Mousseau</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 26 May 2010 17:37:41 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Letting Go
Suspicious 

                                              Determined


Want control                            Want to have space


Don&#039;t want to lose my child

                                               Just want to be a teen

Trying to be responsible 

                                               Trying to have fun

It was so much easier
when you were little 

                                                i can&#039;t be your baby forever                 

 
Why can&#039;t you just cooperate?

    
                                                 Just an extra half hour?


Then you&#039;re going to get into trouble

 
                                                   But i&#039;m responsible

I&#039;m not sure

   
                                                    please mom,please!?

Will you call me?
So i know you&#039;re safe? 


                                                    I can do that



I love you Honey                            I love you Mom</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Letting Go<br />
Suspicious </p>
<p>                                              Determined</p>
<p>Want control                            Want to have space</p>
<p>Don&#8217;t want to lose my child</p>
<p>                                               Just want to be a teen</p>
<p>Trying to be responsible </p>
<p>                                               Trying to have fun</p>
<p>It was so much easier<br />
when you were little </p>
<p>                                                i can&#8217;t be your baby forever                 </p>
<p>Why can&#8217;t you just cooperate?</p>
<p>                                                 Just an extra half hour?</p>
<p>Then you&#8217;re going to get into trouble</p>
<p>                                                   But i&#8217;m responsible</p>
<p>I&#8217;m not sure</p>
<p>                                                    please mom,please!?</p>
<p>Will you call me?<br />
So i know you&#8217;re safe? </p>
<p>                                                    I can do that</p>
<p>I love you Honey                            I love you Mom</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph…2009 Elementary Winner by Miranda's Class</title>
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		<dc:creator>Miranda's Class</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 24 May 2010 15:36:18 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Flamingos are  interesting  birds.  When baby flamingos are born they are white as snow.  Later on, when they start eating shrimp they turn pink.  They  all have really long necks. Their long neck helps them find their food.  They love to be around lakes or near the sea.  Sometimes  flamingos rest by standing on one leg.   These are just some  facts about the beautiful flamingos.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Flamingos are  interesting  birds.  When baby flamingos are born they are white as snow.  Later on, when they start eating shrimp they turn pink.  They  all have really long necks. Their long neck helps them find their food.  They love to be around lakes or near the sea.  Sometimes  flamingos rest by standing on one leg.   These are just some  facts about the beautiful flamingos.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph…2010 Elementary Winner by Jacob</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2010/05/18/tell-the-story-behind-this-photograph%e2%80%a62010-elementary-winner/comment-page-1/#comment-433</link>
		<dc:creator>Jacob</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 20 May 2010 14:20:16 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>That&#039;s so cool.  It looks like a dog&#039;s view from looking out of a cage.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>That&#8217;s so cool.  It looks like a dog&#8217;s view from looking out of a cage.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Tell the Story Behind this Photograph…2010 High School Winner by Theresa</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2010/05/18/tell-the-story-behind-this-photograph%e2%80%a62010-high-school-winner/comment-page-1/#comment-432</link>
		<dc:creator>Theresa</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 20 May 2010 14:18:38 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Looking around in the wood,
and not having any food.
I find a bunch of eggs,
sticking out of them are legs.
&quot;Oh,wow!&quot; I say
during the month of May.
I&#039;m going to name them all RAY!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Looking around in the wood,<br />
and not having any food.<br />
I find a bunch of eggs,<br />
sticking out of them are legs.<br />
&#8220;Oh,wow!&#8221; I say<br />
during the month of May.<br />
I&#8217;m going to name them all RAY!</p>
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