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		<title>Comment on You&#8217;re on a Gigantic Roll! by Tymoteusz, Preston, and Grayson</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/12/13/youre-on-a-gigantic-roll/#comment-130</link>
		<dc:creator>Tymoteusz, Preston, and Grayson</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 19 Jun 2008 20:54:28 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>The Giant Mango
By: Tymoteusz, Preston, and Grayson
Grade: 3-4

Once in a small town at a daycare center beside a mango tree, a troublemaker decided it might be fun to knock over a big bag of fertilizer. He knocked it over on the roots of a mango tree. Soon a mango started growing and growing until it pulled the tree right out of the ground. Then the giant mango started rolling out of control. 

The giant mango rolled right inside the nearby daycare center, causing the diapers to explode all over the place. One even exploded right into Tym’s face. He started crying, “My face.” He grabbed the diaper and chucked it on the ground, but then the great “beast” appeared before him. Tym said, “Easy big fellow,” but it was too late. He was as flat as paper. 

After smashing through houses and crashing through walls, the monstrous mango suddenly left the destroyed town, heading straight for the town power well. Rolling at a high speed, it crashed into the power well and tipped it over. 

Creak ! Kaboom! Mango was flying everywhere, accelerating at a high speed. 

While sitting on a bench, a grandma watched the mango explode into the honey bucket. Sparks hit her head and she screamed, “Fire, fire, fire!” When the firemen arrived, they shot their squirt guns at the mango, causing it to absorb the water and pop into millions of pieces. 

At last, the little troublemaking kid had to pickup all the pieces of the mango that had exploded all over the town. Then the little bad kid had an idea to sell the pieces of mango on e-Bay. His plan worked and he used the money to fix up the town with his new power tools. After fixing up the town, everyone lived happily ever after…well…at least until the bad kid bought more fertilizer.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>The Giant Mango<br />
By: Tymoteusz, Preston, and Grayson<br />
Grade: 3-4</p>
<p>Once in a small town at a daycare center beside a mango tree, a troublemaker decided it might be fun to knock over a big bag of fertilizer. He knocked it over on the roots of a mango tree. Soon a mango started growing and growing until it pulled the tree right out of the ground. Then the giant mango started rolling out of control. </p>
<p>The giant mango rolled right inside the nearby daycare center, causing the diapers to explode all over the place. One even exploded right into Tym’s face. He started crying, “My face.” He grabbed the diaper and chucked it on the ground, but then the great “beast” appeared before him. Tym said, “Easy big fellow,” but it was too late. He was as flat as paper. </p>
<p>After smashing through houses and crashing through walls, the monstrous mango suddenly left the destroyed town, heading straight for the town power well. Rolling at a high speed, it crashed into the power well and tipped it over. </p>
<p>Creak ! Kaboom! Mango was flying everywhere, accelerating at a high speed. </p>
<p>While sitting on a bench, a grandma watched the mango explode into the honey bucket. Sparks hit her head and she screamed, “Fire, fire, fire!” When the firemen arrived, they shot their squirt guns at the mango, causing it to absorb the water and pop into millions of pieces. </p>
<p>At last, the little troublemaking kid had to pickup all the pieces of the mango that had exploded all over the town. Then the little bad kid had an idea to sell the pieces of mango on e-Bay. His plan worked and he used the money to fix up the town with his new power tools. After fixing up the town, everyone lived happily ever after…well…at least until the bad kid bought more fertilizer.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Floating Down a River&#8230; by Caroline and Mrs. Jorge</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/15/4/#comment-127</link>
		<dc:creator>Caroline and Mrs. Jorge</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 19 May 2008 08:26:32 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>“Floating Down the River”
By Caroline Ferguson
Age 12

	Ruby was walking near a river with beautiful trees along the bank, furry animals hiding in the branches and people picnicking in the shade of the trees.  She saw a wooden boat nearby.  Ruby grabbed the boat and headed off into the green, blue water.  There was a strong current and many rocks.  It was hard to control the boat but she managed.
	Ruby found a stick floating nearby. She grabbed it and started paddling along.  Suddenly Ruby heard a noise.  “Help, help,” someone cried.  She saw a man struggling to stay afloat, fighting the current.  She grabbed his hand.  He jumped into the boat and took huge, deep breaths.  
After a few minutes he gasped, “Hi, my name is Mica.  I’m a forest ranger, and I help endangered animals.”  Ruby said, “How did you fall into the water?”  Mica answered back, “Those crocodiles don’t like me.  They think that I’m their dinner.”  Mica asked, “Where are you heading?”  Ruby answered, “I do not know.  I just love looking at this beautiful place with so many animals and plants around me.”  “Do you want to explore with me?” Ruby asked.   Mica said, “This place is beautiful.  Of course, I would love to join you.” Off they went on their adventure!
	Mica and Ruby passed a wild monkey.  Before she knew what was happening, the monkey jumped from the tree and started gnawing on Ruby’s long blond hair.  Ruby threw the monkey into the water and started paddling fast to get away.  
	When they were miles from the monkey, Ruby saw a helpless, injured bird in the water.  She lifted the bird out of the water.  Mica said, “You’ve just saved an ivory-billed woodpecker.  They are so rare!  Only a few live today.  You are going to be famous!”  Mica suddenly became very quiet.
	Ruby said, “I can see the shore from here!”  They paddled to the bank and headed to shore.  Ruby said her goodbyes to Mica and the bird.  She handed the bird to Mica and said “You should take the bird to the hospital.  I trust you.  Good luck.” Ruby started to walk away but suddenly looked back, and shouted, “Goodbye!”  But when she turned, everything was gone, even the boat.  Mica and the bird were nowhere to be seen.  She wondered, “Was it even there in the first place?”</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>“Floating Down the River”<br />
By Caroline Ferguson<br />
Age 12</p>
<p>	Ruby was walking near a river with beautiful trees along the bank, furry animals hiding in the branches and people picnicking in the shade of the trees.  She saw a wooden boat nearby.  Ruby grabbed the boat and headed off into the green, blue water.  There was a strong current and many rocks.  It was hard to control the boat but she managed.<br />
	Ruby found a stick floating nearby. She grabbed it and started paddling along.  Suddenly Ruby heard a noise.  “Help, help,” someone cried.  She saw a man struggling to stay afloat, fighting the current.  She grabbed his hand.  He jumped into the boat and took huge, deep breaths.<br />
After a few minutes he gasped, “Hi, my name is Mica.  I’m a forest ranger, and I help endangered animals.”  Ruby said, “How did you fall into the water?”  Mica answered back, “Those crocodiles don’t like me.  They think that I’m their dinner.”  Mica asked, “Where are you heading?”  Ruby answered, “I do not know.  I just love looking at this beautiful place with so many animals and plants around me.”  “Do you want to explore with me?” Ruby asked.   Mica said, “This place is beautiful.  Of course, I would love to join you.” Off they went on their adventure!<br />
	Mica and Ruby passed a wild monkey.  Before she knew what was happening, the monkey jumped from the tree and started gnawing on Ruby’s long blond hair.  Ruby threw the monkey into the water and started paddling fast to get away.<br />
	When they were miles from the monkey, Ruby saw a helpless, injured bird in the water.  She lifted the bird out of the water.  Mica said, “You’ve just saved an ivory-billed woodpecker.  They are so rare!  Only a few live today.  You are going to be famous!”  Mica suddenly became very quiet.<br />
	Ruby said, “I can see the shore from here!”  They paddled to the bank and headed to shore.  Ruby said her goodbyes to Mica and the bird.  She handed the bird to Mica and said “You should take the bird to the hospital.  I trust you.  Good luck.” Ruby started to walk away but suddenly looked back, and shouted, “Goodbye!”  But when she turned, everything was gone, even the boat.  Mica and the bird were nowhere to be seen.  She wondered, “Was it even there in the first place?”</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by Christian M</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-125</link>
		<dc:creator>Christian M</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 05 May 2008 03:49:06 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>So much depends upon
Money in my pocket
Trying to make enough
Just to be the man</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>So much depends upon<br />
Money in my pocket<br />
Trying to make enough<br />
Just to be the man</p>
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		<title>Comment on &#8220;Silly Animal Problems&#8221; Prompt by riley</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2008/02/12/silly-animal-problems-prompt/#comment-123</link>
		<dc:creator>riley</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 08 Apr 2008 15:56:09 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Holly The Hamster

Holly was a hamster. She came from a family called the Hamy family. They all thought that she had a problem. She always got out of her cage and went to the bathroom on the floor. It always smelt like rotten apples all over the house.It was terrible. One day their grandfather came over to get some things. Well we coundnt find Holly so they were worried that their grandfather would start to wonder what that horrible smell was. Then all of the sudden Holly was going on grandfathers shoulder. Grandfather was out the door in the blink of an eye. At that point their mother said that something had to be done about this. Well the children did not want to this they loved Holly. So they had to find something to do about this. Then there it was right in her head she would buy her a new cage it was the best idea ever invented. Well it wasnt the best idea. Do you know how hard Holly can chew? Well i do she chewed right threw that cage. So i had to think of a better plan. There it was right in my head i knew what i would do. I would put a rock where she had been chewing and getting out. It worked for a while then she chewed another hole. So then i had to think of another and a better plan. Then it hit me i would put her in this really cool  box that had everything that shr needed in it. It also had holes in it so she could breath and it worked we never smelt the smell of rotten apples again!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Holly The Hamster</p>
<p>Holly was a hamster. She came from a family called the Hamy family. They all thought that she had a problem. She always got out of her cage and went to the bathroom on the floor. It always smelt like rotten apples all over the house.It was terrible. One day their grandfather came over to get some things. Well we coundnt find Holly so they were worried that their grandfather would start to wonder what that horrible smell was. Then all of the sudden Holly was going on grandfathers shoulder. Grandfather was out the door in the blink of an eye. At that point their mother said that something had to be done about this. Well the children did not want to this they loved Holly. So they had to find something to do about this. Then there it was right in her head she would buy her a new cage it was the best idea ever invented. Well it wasnt the best idea. Do you know how hard Holly can chew? Well i do she chewed right threw that cage. So i had to think of a better plan. There it was right in my head i knew what i would do. I would put a rock where she had been chewing and getting out. It worked for a while then she chewed another hole. So then i had to think of another and a better plan. Then it hit me i would put her in this really cool  box that had everything that shr needed in it. It also had holes in it so she could breath and it worked we never smelt the smell of rotten apples again!</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by AnthonyM</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-117</link>
		<dc:creator>AnthonyM</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:13:29 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>so much depends upon
a sleeping man holding
a white rose inside
a well crafted box</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>so much depends upon<br />
a sleeping man holding<br />
a white rose inside<br />
a well crafted box</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by HaydnJ</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-116</link>
		<dc:creator>HaydnJ</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:11:52 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>so much depends upon 
a wooden writing stick
#2, yellow, eraser with
lead in the middle</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>so much depends upon<br />
a wooden writing stick<br />
#2, yellow, eraser with<br />
lead in the middle</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by WeslyG</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-115</link>
		<dc:creator>WeslyG</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:10:58 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>so much depends upon
the red steel support
that holds the bridge
above the blue ocean</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>so much depends upon<br />
the red steel support<br />
that holds the bridge<br />
above the blue ocean</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by Josh W.</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-114</link>
		<dc:creator>Josh W.</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:09:50 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>so much depends upon 
the red liquid ionside
that keeps us weighed
on the global surface</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>so much depends upon<br />
the red liquid ionside<br />
that keeps us weighed<br />
on the global surface</p>
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		<title>Comment on So Much Depends Upon&#8230; by Josh W.</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2007/11/16/so-much-depends-upon/#comment-113</link>
		<dc:creator>Josh W.</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:08:56 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>so much depends upon
a wet, ragged flag
hanging on a building 
thinking of its people</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>so much depends upon<br />
a wet, ragged flag<br />
hanging on a building<br />
thinking of its people</p>
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		<title>Comment on &#8220;Silly Animal Problems&#8221; Prompt by olajuwon</title>
		<link>http://writingfix1.edublogs.org/2008/02/12/silly-animal-problems-prompt/#comment-112</link>
		<dc:creator>olajuwon</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 31 Mar 2008 18:01:21 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Bow Wow The Bear!!!!!!!                                                                                                                     There once was a bear named  Wow  he had a big problem he couldent eat he coldent catch a fish ? His mom and dad wereod about him.  He just wasent normal.   
                           It was a nise day out side whin his dad tried to teach him how to fish he trid puting his favrit food at the botomof the lake he just couldent swim that was not a good sighn for a baer
                                                                                                                                           He tolled his dad i will never be as good at fishing like all the reast of the bears so wow walked of and leaft his dad at the lake whin he got to the woodes he feallt lost he had never bin in the woodes befor  so he didnt know his way arond  he whished he never left his dad .   He found a new friend he was a monkey named bob hanging from a tree the monkey whas  not a good catcher .
             he meat a new friend in the forist he was a snake he asked what is the problem   i cant fish like the rest</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Bow Wow The Bear!!!!!!!                                                                                                                     There once was a bear named  Wow  he had a big problem he couldent eat he coldent catch a fish ? His mom and dad wereod about him.  He just wasent normal.<br />
                           It was a nise day out side whin his dad tried to teach him how to fish he trid puting his favrit food at the botomof the lake he just couldent swim that was not a good sighn for a baer<br />
                                                                                                                                           He tolled his dad i will never be as good at fishing like all the reast of the bears so wow walked of and leaft his dad at the lake whin he got to the woodes he feallt lost he had never bin in the woodes befor  so he didnt know his way arond  he whished he never left his dad .   He found a new friend he was a monkey named bob hanging from a tree the monkey whas  not a good catcher .<br />
             he meat a new friend in the forist he was a snake he asked what is the problem   i cant fish like the rest</p>
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